Man,Woman and Child ( Winner of Horror Story Contest )

C.Ronaldo

story!! Great thinking and Imagination! Ryan you wrote like a real novel writer!

imunique

Ryan, it's like a complete one and half hour movie ..fab effort.. and Man is this the reason u keep awake late at nights..

enjoyed reading indeed

Ninja

Fantastic story Ryan, awesome talent you've got.

The other possible conclusion,the ghost of Anna and Emma were actually haunting him.They wanted revenge for what happened in the tunnel,that night. And driving him insane, and making him kill himself was their way of taking revenge. The scene in the end around the dinner table, with Emma talking to Anna meant, they were not afterall, a mere figment of his imagination.

Why revenge, he took them coz he wanted to see Anna happy. According to the plot even Anna was happy moving over to the island.

C.Ronaldo

A flaw taken out of Ryan's story

Ninja

^ Not a flaw Ronaldo, just a clarification

xXx

You are a Very Good Compositor, as can be seen in pictures & the story as well

Narration....

the screenplay was excellent & the character build up was too good. the background of the characters were brief but necessary to get us involved in the story. there were loose ends, which you covered up in the above post of yours

also as yammy mentioned lifted from horror flicks, it seemed to me the same.

but that shud not be of any hindrance as the tension lets you forget many of those shortcomings

grammatical errors otherwise the atmosphere build up was amazing. you are glued to know what happens next, not for the ending, but for the story it certainly deserves its accolades.

definitely a continuation would suffice us

heathcliff

Agnel

Originally Posted by Private Ryan

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A few questions were left unanswered,intentionally.

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Who was the woman in the middle of the road,who was crushed under the truck? Was she human,evil or possessed.Who was the father of the child? A human or..? Was she there to commit suicide? I left her in the dark completely. Giving details about that woman would have taken away the creepiness of that character.

All that happened in the hospital was his imagination,or was it real? The third possible conclusion,that i missed,that they actually existed,but disappeared in the end,could've answered that.

The loose ends makes it looks like the creepiness had no source

It must begin somewhere... like, Dylan had a girl friend who got pregnant with his child, but he left that girl and ran away?

Better finish off the lose ends

I need a sequel, prequel... what ever

C.Ronaldo

sequel I know but wats that prequel

Ninja

It must begin somewhere... like, Dylan had a girl friend who got pregnant with his child, but he left that girl and ran away?

I was expecting it to end on that lines actually

, especially when i read the line below.

That night,in two separate wards, two lives had perished.A mother and a child. And two lives had survived.A mother and a child.

I thought Ryan would relate this in the end, but then if he did that we would have blamed him for being predictable. Its still a damn good story.